Lights out, but still do fingers play
staccato bursts on glowing keys.
A smile received from far away,
betwixt forbidden fantasies.
Staccato bursts on glowing keys
play softly, lest they give away,
betwixt forbidden fantasies
the need to leave, the urge to stay.
Play softly, lest we give away
to wakeful, prying, hungry eyes.
We need to leave and urge to stay
with breaking glass for lullabies.
Those wakeful, prying, hungry eyes
still prowl where joy is sometimes found.
With breaking glass for lullabies,
to sleeplessness lie herein bound.
Still, prowl where joy is sometimes found,
and surely they shall find us here.
To sleeplessness we lie here bound,
and while together, feel no fear.
And surely they shall find us here,
our smiles received from far away.
And while together, feel no fear.
Lights out, but still our fingers play.













Comments
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Oh my god. I have fucking Jaffa cakes in my coat pocket! Oh mamma! Oh daddy! Let's all play kabadi!
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but the poem itself came off as more of a lullabye than anything
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One is never dissappointed when you're a nihilist
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I know that never in the world
Could I have found me such a girl
Who's there to pick me up before I fall
~Mike Nesmith~
True to the spirit if not the letter of the law, but I'm uncomfortable with the metre of line 3 and its fraternal twin in the final stanza.
Most of all, I love the mood of the whole piece. The tone is set by the form being appropriate to the subject matter, with the exchange of messages having its parallel in the repetition of the alternate lines. It's almost like actually being there!
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