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The Greatest Treasure Yet by ~Smartster:iconSmartster:



Your smile's the greatest treasure yet.
Your eyes are pools in which I drown.
Your face is one I can't forget;
My angel, you deserve a crown.

So deep, those pools in which I drown,
To carry me through tragic night.
My angel, you deserve a crown,
For gifting me with smiles of light.

You carry me through tragic night,
You hold me when I cannot stand.
For gifting me with smiles of light,
I'll take you, in turn, by the hand.

You hold me when I cannot stand,
From all the beatings on my soul.
I'll take you, in turn, by the hand,
And stand with you to make you whole.

From all the beatings on my soul,
My love, I give you all my heart.
I'll stand with you to make you whole,
And see that we may never part.

My love, I give you all my heart;
My soul, and know I won't forget.
I'll see that we may never part--
Your smile's the greatest treasure yet.
©2006-2009 ~Smartster
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Author's Comments

Something I wrote for Day Five of the Poetry Week contests, and I was rather proud of it. This style, the pantoum, was fun to write in...even if it IS rather difficult. I might try to do more in this style; I really enjoyed myself writing this one.

I also think I need to pay Jameson back for being such a sweetheart this morning and giving me a Korn sound edit. Besides, he's such an adorable muse, I can't help but write about/for him. :aww:

:heart: I love you, Jamie! :heart:

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:iconmatto-sensei:
I'm personally a fan of the subject material of this poem. Love is certainly a feeling to be cherished.
:iconsmartster:
He liked this one, too. :blushes:

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:iconsmartster:
Thank you! And thanks for the :+fav: as well! :thanks:

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:iconmarygreen:
You are very welcome!
:iconlaurenjerry:
awww! this is so flippin' adorable!

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Funny thing about black and white. You mix it together and you get grey. And it doesn't matter how much white you try and put back in, you're never gonna get anything but grey.
-Lilah Morgan "Angel"
:iconsmartster:
Thanks! :) Heh, I try! :D

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:heart: ~13lade6rip & ~Smartster :heart:

Joey's Memory Lives On

~ZTNH-Fanbase <-- Awesome club I'm admin for.

~DaemonGiggles = My hero!
:iconlaurenjerry:
you're very welcome and very talented

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Funny thing about black and white. You mix it together and you get grey. And it doesn't matter how much white you try and put back in, you're never gonna get anything but grey.
-Lilah Morgan "Angel"
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:blushes: Awww, thanks so much! :hug:

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:heart: ~13lade6rip & ~Smartster :heart:

Joey's Memory Lives On

~ZTNH-Fanbase <-- Awesome club I'm admin for.

~DaemonGiggles = My hero!

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